Sweet! I'll send it on to Barry and see what he thinks.
I'll go over it again tonight. Some are minor grammar/spelling mistakes, which I can fix. The rest will be a little more in depth. While I agree that 1st person is more intimate, it can make for jerky reading when there's a lot of it. You might want to think about breaking it into smaller chapters. That way you can have an important scenes in 1st person, then change the rest into 3rd so your reader doesn't get swamped.
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Date: 2008-09-29 02:44 pm (UTC)I'll go over it again tonight. Some are minor grammar/spelling mistakes, which I can fix. The rest will be a little more in depth. While I agree that 1st person is more intimate, it can make for jerky reading when there's a lot of it. You might want to think about breaking it into smaller chapters. That way you can have an important scenes in 1st person, then change the rest into 3rd so your reader doesn't get swamped.